I think you have an interesting moveset here, but I think on the whole you've got two different core concepts competing with one another, resulting in something that's less than the sum of its parts. I'm not familiar with this character, so I couldn't give an accurate critique on lore accuracy or flavor, but I would like permission to critique this character in more depth to point out where the concept is strongest, where it's weakest, and how I think it could be improved.
Posted: Sep 01, 2020