Thanks for the in-depth review! I'd like to address some things, and also think about possible changes (if you're still interested you can let me know how they sound). First, about the general wordiness/amount of text, I see where you're coming from, especially for HotS. Blizzard has definitely tended toward more simple abilities for the game, doubly so with lighter word counts since you can see the abilities in action which clears up any vagueness in wording. For me, though, I think it's...

Hey! If you're interested in leaving feedback I'd love to see it, I'm always happy to hear criticisms and such about my concepts :)

This concept looks good, but I don’t think we’re likely to get Nemsy in the game. You should make it for a different warlock, like Grommash.

Hello! I'm interesting in participating, but I just have a quick question about concept eligibility rules. If a Hero Concept has already been created and posted on HeroesFire, and we update it during the contest time period, is it counted as submitted? I plan to create a new one myself but I think it would be good to know for clarity.

I quite like this concept, I think it strikes a good balance between a gimmicks and normal gameplay that would work in the game. I've seen some other concepts for Rock n' Roll Racers, and they usually feel like they go too far into the driving/racing gimmick to be reasonably playable, but like I said this one loos like it has a good balance. Since I don't think you mentioned it, how would collisions with enemy heroes work? You specify for walls, but body blocking is generally a thing so...

I like this concept a lot! The Void Rift mechanic is very interesting, and offers some high skill play for the hero. The other abilities are mostly basic, but the way they interact with Void Rifts is what makes the kit good overall. I have some complaints about the Void Rift implementation, but nothing big. First, you don't specify how long they last, or if they last until replaced. Second, it might be more interesting and skillful if you can quickly redeploy Void Rifts between abilities;...

Thanks, I'm glad you like the concept! (Sorry for the late response :P)

Thanks again! I appreciate more in-depth feedback always, and also your questions should help me improve the concept. On to answering... 1) "Clockwork Blast" sounds much more aggressive and less like a status effect, so I probably won't go with that one. I like the flavor behind "Stroke of Midnight" though, I'll likely change it to that or something similar. 2) Tick-Tock can be activated while there are no active Time Bombs; however... 2.1) Clockwork Companion's...

Thanks for the comment! Time Stop is intended to have a global effect, with the idea being to put the whole game on pause for a little bit so that Toki can set up or try to help her team out of a fight they shouldn't have taken. And yes, I'll think of an alternate name for it, the naming is a little confusing :P

Thanks, I'm glad you like the concept! The Tracking radius is definitely something that I've been going back and forth on; my original draft I thought a very large radius would be good, then when I went to update the concept that seemed too much so I'm thinking it'd be better at about the width of a lane (so if Shaw hangs around at the edge he has a warning of approaching enemies or enemies at a jungle camp, but otherwise it doesn't provide too much vision). That's definitely something I'll...